What do u think about this story?

I'm going to be honest... I tried editing it but after he duplicated himself I got confused and completely lost at what was going on. You need to edit this yourself hon, because you know what is happening and in all honesty I don't have a clue! It seems like when you wrote half of it you got bored - Your grammar, spelling, puncuation and so on suddenly seem to get "sloppy" like you couldn't be bothered any more. We cannot edit this properly if you can't at least try to write it well in the first place. Sorry to be harsh, but it's true.